onto the wet grass below.
The big oak tree
allows soggy moss to spread
around its old dusty branches.
Hi lily your poem reminds me of the time I came to the school at night and played on the playground and slipped of the platform lucky I had heaps of layers on and it was raining on the grass and made it soggy. I like the way you said the big oak tree allows soggy moss to spread around it old soggy branches also i like the way you said the sun settles as moonlight shines down into the wet grass below.
Wow I really enjoyed your writing it reminded me of when autumn comes and all I can see is brush strokes of orange,yellow and red everywhere I look. I also really liked how it said the sun settles as the moonlight shines down because it explains what happened when the sun went down. Overall I loved reading your peice of writing.